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None of a Chinese will forget the Beijing Olympics,even more no one will forget the capital business card-the smile of volunteers,called never fade smile circle . There were about 1700000 volunteers who offered service for the Beijing Olympics.Actually,an increasing number of people become volunteers every year in China.According to statistics,in 2012 the number of registering volunteers has more than 30 million in China. Volunteer service has many meanings.On the one hand,it can help people in need,bring hope,warmth and change to people.And make the best use of social resources,enhance citizens' sense of belonging.On the other hand,for individuals,can expand the circle of life,people can experience more social things,deepen the understanding of society,also can develop their organization and leadership skills. From my viewpoint,volunteer activities pass love,spread of civilization.As modern college students,we should involve in volunteering actions.This on the society and our people is good but no harm.