作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
If we don’t save water,the last drop of water will be a teardrop,which tells us that water is very important. Firstly,we can't live without water because the water form our bodies.Secondly,the amount of water suitable to drink is less and less nowadays.And I think one day we will have no water to drink.Then,the water pollution becomes very serious.The river and the lake are all polluted by people. Because the water is important for us,we should protect the water resource.As a student,I should try my best to ask people to recycle water.And we should stop people from pouring the waste water into the lake or river.Lastly,we can start out from little things from now on,we can protect the water by ourselves!