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Recent years have witnessed a mounting number of people like shopping online, towards which people's opinions vary from person to person. There is not doubt that it has many advantages, but it doesn't mean online shopping doesn't have the weakness. On the one hand, obviously, shopping online has many strengths. For instance, we can save many time if we shop online. Besides, we get conveniences from online shopping, which provides a lot of merchandises for us to choose. On the other hand, what the problem of shopping online causes is impacting on our normal life. For example, the quality of goods aren't guaranteed when we shop online. If we buy something online as the present for our friends, they may receive some poor quality goods, which makes us feel embarrassed in front of our friends. Every coin has two sides. From my point of view, I think shopping with our friends is a good thing. We can shop with them if we have free time. Otherwise, if we don't have leisure time, shopping online is a good choice either.