文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升;能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
The Internet In the era of information and technology ,the Internet has risen a storm in our daily life and it is involved in every corner surrounding us .Some people think that the Internet can make education and work more efficient .While others hold the view that the youth will be addicted to the network games and then their study will be affected sharply. As for the people who support the Internet ,the reasons are prominent.They can assist people lessen our pressure from the hard work and study .Some tools of the Internet ,such music players ,QQ group,can entertain their body;while some of them ,such as surfing the Internet ,could advance people to keep a mental health . However ,the people holding the view that many kinds of Internet recreational activities have negative effects on our life and academic study,apparently,the main reason is that plenty of people could not resist the temptation of these entertainment activities.So at last they are lured away from their study and work . As far as I am concerned ,we should pay more attention to the advantages of various Internet websites library and make use of them .Meanwhile,we would better absorb how to employ those Internet information positively so as to make them a beneficial tool for our development.