初中英语命题作文真题演练(77):Looking for a pen pal

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Looking for a pen pal My name is Mary Connor．I’m American and I’m a nurse in Rosewood Hospital．I’m 20 years old and I’m single．I like playing tennis，listening to music and I am also fond of computer games．My brother is a teacher，who likes collecting coins of different countries．Our parents are from the USA I but we live in Brighton now．My mother is a painter and my father is doctor． I’d like a pen pal from Japan or China who is at about the same age and has the same hobbies with me．Please write to：63 Lily Road，London SW1，England．