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Nowadays, more and more museums are free admission to the public. A lot of people have been attracted to the museums. However, the policy of free admission to museums appeared unexpected situation. With the rapid development and popularity of computers and smart phones, people can know many things through Internet, but many culture relics, arts and histories only exist in the museum. When free admission to museums, people can realized them are interested in things by museums. Nevertheless, the policy lead to many problems. For example, the beggar begging will end up in a museum, and crowds may be damage culture relics in the museum. In my opinion, the policy of free admission to museums is wonderfull. But along with increased of people visit the museum, museums should set up concered with measures, such as maintain the order.