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Today,online shopping has become a fashionable way for many people,for more and more people are less likely to go out than stay at home,especially at chinese. In my opinion,online shopping brings lots of good aspection to our life,such as we can get all goods that we what without going out,and there are many shops on the internet,we can look through them while we are sit on our comfortable chair.the feeling is pretty good when we just need to stay at our home to receive our things,it's so convenient for us. but like there are always two sides of a coin,there still are bad aspects to shopping at net,too.the most obvious shortcoming is that net is virture,so we don't know whether the good that will be mail to us will be looked like the pictures that we've saw at net,and after we get the goods,we can't exchange it if we don't be satisfacted. my advice about onlion shopping is that we can buy some cheap things at net,and when we need to buy expensive goods,it would be much better to buy them at road shops.
