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My favourite sport is football. One day, I picked up a football on my way home. I found I have been addicted into this sports after I played it with my friends for a while. Since then, I always practice playing football with calssmates and we have taken a lot of mathces. Beckham is my favourite football star and I really want to be a professional football player oneday.