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My favorite sport in football.One day,I find a football by chance in my way home and pike it up.After then,I always play football with my friends after class.And,I love playing football deeply from then on.I always do excercite and play games together with my friends and classmates. My favorite football player is 贝克汉姆 and I have a dream in which l can become a professional football player in future.SO,I will do all I can to play football best.