Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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From the Bureau of Labor Statistics, we can learn that people's income increase and unemployment rate decrease with they education levels. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, most of corporations require highly educated's person with ability. On the one hand, they have a lot of knowlege through study in school. On the other hands, it's easy that they can learn skillfully jobs more than low degree. At the some times, as time goes by them still keep up with age through their study ability. Therefore, the low degree's people only working on construction sites, factories, restaurants and home services industry, those jobs has one common that are low wage. In my opinion, education pays is necessary. Today is an era of secien and technology, we want to look for good job and highly wage that only learn most knowledge.