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Hi,everyone,there is school broadcast.I am Mary and today I will tell all of you a big surprise.Guess what?Well,there will be a lecture at 2:30pm on thursday,yes,it's on May 5th.I hope all students and teachers will come here .The theme is about China Spaceflight.It will introduce the development background and simple process of China Spaceflight.Also the development of the Shenzhou spaceships and the information about astronauts.I think maybe science students are more interested in it,right?Ok,and then the lecturer,oh my god,is Beijing University professor Li Bo,wow,did you here me,everybody?It's Dr.Li!Don't miss this chance,maybe you could talk to him,exchange ideas with each other.Don't be late.See you at School Reporting Hall.