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It is important to have a healthy body. More and more people want to keep in good health. But how to keep healthy? I have some ideas. First we should eat healthy food."An apple a day keeps the doctor away". So we should eat more vegetables and fruits to instead junk foods. We should drink milk everyday, too. Second we should exercise a lot. Doing sports is a good way to keep healthy. Third we should have a good hobby. And we should have a good rest ,too. Just do like this, then we will have a healthy body.