4. 文具方面。
过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;注意文中个别的句子错误;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
we need to do something to protect our living enviroment,and I list some suggestion that I hope everybody can do it right now. We like eating snak,but the package we should put it into the rubbish bin, don't throw it everywhere;I often see some people wears the further of some wild animals,it makes many treasure animals is losting ,so we have the duty to outcry to prevent hunting animals. With the development of the society,we need much water and electricity to supply the power for the industy,but the source isn't infinit, so we should save the water and electricity in some ways, for example,when you leave home you can cut down the electricity.