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my name is tc and my best friend is ljw.he is my high school mate,as you can see,we are get good in the lifetime.he always help me,everytime i have trouble with study,he will help me at once.oh he also play games after school. last year,he left to Beijing.At thoese day i feel very sad.still in this day .I still miss him.