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dear TOM I heard that you are planning to Taiwan recently.So I'd like to introduce Taiwan to you in advance . Taiwan is China's largest island, is located in the southeast of fujian .The population of more than two thousand .Abundant natural resources, is rich in bananas, rice, tea .Taiwan has Beautiful scenery, pleasant weather, tourists from all over the world .so Taiwan is a very good choice Looking forward to your arrival