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Nowadays, more and more people ignore the civilization with the association is developing quickly. Nonetheless in my opinion, civilization is the most essential quality that people should have. Someone likes smoking in public or speak to their acquaintance loudly. In fact, I think these manners are rude and impolite. Everyone is supposed to respect other persons whenever and wherever. The civilization is so necessary for a man or a woman that everyone should pay attention to it. While you are doing some impolite behaviors in public, maybe other persons who are stay with you will fall unhappy and despised. Sometimes not civilizable conduct will make your friends or your partners look down upon you. Polite and civilizable manners can show our high quality, and I really hope that everyone in our world can treat others politely, so that we can be more civilizable!