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Playing soccer is one of things that I love best.I fell in love with it all by chance.Once I got a football which may be someone lost.Then we played with it.Since then I was deeply in love with it.Now I always practice playing it and take games with my friends.My favorite soccer player is Beckham who is extremely cool when he is playing football.I exercise hard in order to become a professional football player that is my biggest dream.