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My name is Jessica .My favorite sport is playing football .You may ask me why I can fall in love with playing football .I love football by accident .One day,in my way to home,I picked up a football.Then I played with my friends.We had a great time.After this day,I often play football with my friends .I also have some training or games.My favorite football player is beikehanmu .I hope I can be a professional football player .I hope my dream will come true someday .