2011年12月10日雅思写作真题:如何处理人与自然的关系

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As he playing golf not very long,Wang Jing became a member of Hua Kai just last year.However,in a odd way,he is very familiar with HuaKai’s workers.Besides his outgoing personality,the key reason is that he regards HuaKai as his home court of golf.First playing,first birdle,and first century record---there are almost all of “first time”of WangJing’s golf life have happened in HuaKai.”Hua Kai is my ‘first love’,I have gone through a lot of ‘first time’ at here……”said Wang Jing himself.