2011年12月10日雅思写作真题:如何处理人与自然的关系

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As playing golf not very long,Wang Jing became a member of Hua Kai just last year.However,in an odd way,he is very familiar with HuaKai’s workers.Besides his outgoing personality,the key reason is that he regards HuaKai as his home court of golf.First playing,first birdle,and first century record---there are almost all of “first time”of WangJing’s golf life have happened in HuaKai.”Hua Kai is my ‘first love’,I have gone through a lot of ‘first time’ at here……”said Wang Jing himself.