Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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According to the statistic ,we can learn the difference between the high and low degree's level .The high degree not only has lower unemployment rate but also has higher salary .It's a metaphor that if we have a brilliantly certificate ,we are the people who have own elegantly future .Should we have a beautiful certificate is the most important thing ? At least ,i don't agree with it .With the development of urbanization ,we need high lettered person to serve the society but if our house need to be constructed who exactly help us,i think the only answer is ''worker''.They don't have some certificates maybe they just graduated from high school or worse .