Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
According to the statistic ,we can learn the difference between the high and low degree's level .The high degree not only has lower unemployment rate but also has higher salary .It's a metaphor that if we have a nice certificate ,we are the people who have thire own elegantly future .Should we have a beautiful certificate is the most important thing ? At least ,i don't agree with it .With the development of urbanization ,we need high lettered person to serve the society but if our house need to be constructed who exactly help us,i think the only answer is ''worker''.They don't have some certificates maybe they just graduated from high school or worse .