2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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Nowadays so many goods are changed on excessive packaging.It's not a good news. In past time,people usually buy the goods with little packaging to protack the enviroment. For this news,I have my own opinion that the bussiniseman want to make their goods a good price.It's so bad,so many good is waste for packaging .We have no place.