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雅思写作范文:父母应该多陪孩子

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Undoubtedly,children are special herb needing enough love and concern,whereas parents seemly do not pay many attention to them. Therefore,the opinion that kids should be cared by mom and dad is positioned and becoming increasing popular in modern fast-speed society. Obviously,the proclaim is reasonable.At least it is a way to enhance humony .As we know,building and sustaining a closing relationship generally requires not only a long-term and frequent connection but common sense and interest.Gathering family together provide the opportunity to know membership well by observation and communication ,knowing what children like or dislike and finding common hobby,which may lay foundation for coorespondation.

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