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My name is Maria. My families call me Mary. I am twenty years old. I am Chinese, I come from Kunming. There are three people in my family, my husband,my son and I. My husband is a officer, he can not always go home. I am a secretary of a technology company. I work during the day. My husband and I only see each other on the weekends. My son is a pupil.He is the third grade. We are not rich but we are a happy family.