拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;行文稍欠流畅,应适当增加连接词的使用;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误。
Recently,it has occurred to some events which hurt many students.These events not only bring us shock but also make us lost in considerance. Only is it harmful in any aspect.For one thing,it hurt those students' body and soul.For another thing,the whole society will raise a storm of horror.On the whole,it is obvious that the effect is full of disadvantages. Faced with the serious problem,the immediate measures is so significate.Firstly,we should take care of the students and keep the society stable.Then,the court must punish the men who take part in the events through law.Last but not least,the school ought to develop the manage and spread the knowledge about how to protect ourselves.