作者在句法层面做的很棒;上下文衔接稍显不流畅;文中词汇表达较灵活丰富,不过请检查文章的单词拼写。
It's very comom for students to do the part-time job in universities nowadays.However,some people think it is good ,while others are not.what's the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-tiime jobs? On the one hand,by doing some part-time job,students can earn extra money, and they can use the money to buy what they want ;especially for the students from the poor family,they can support themselves by the money.Besides, doing part-time job is a good oppotunity for students to get closer to the real society,which students can accumulate experience from the job. while there are also some drawbacks on doing part-time job. Because some students can not banlance the time on study and part-time job, putting too much time on doing part-time job,which do harm to their academic performances. What's more,for most students know little about the society, they easily are cheated by some high salary jobs. In my opinions, if the students can improve their abilty to tell clealy what's good and bad, and learn how to balance the time between study and job, doing part-time job is a good choice for the students.That will be a special experience in university.