Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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As we can see from the chart ,which data come from Bureau of labor statistics,current population survey in 2011 ,different education pays have different unemployment rate and median weekly earning .the more degree ,the little unemployment and the more weekly earning. apart from these people who have professional degree have the unemployment rate only 2.4% but the most high weekly earning . the reasons are as following .first ,the unemployment rate force some people to continue education so that they will select a satisfy job in the future .second,with the development of society and technology ,more and more job need professional people.last but not the least, a part of job seekers don not have a right work notion . As far as i am concerned ,to find a pleased work ,we had better improving ourself in the future competetion .at the same time ,the government should offer more job opportunities.