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In modern society,one family has one child.Children are gave high expectations.A majority of parents do anything for their children that bring about children depend on parents.Then,how should parents help children to be independent? On the one hand,parents should ask for kid do some housework instead of only do homework.On the other hand, when your child has a problem you should talk with him and give suggestion to him.In addition,parents are supposed to provide a chance that led them go into society and conmmunicate with other people. Efforts should be made to improve this situation.Children can have health and happy life by the foregoing ways.And then,to be independent can develop responsibility.In a word,it is a basis for children contribution to the society.