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With the invention of the internet,our life is full of convience and interesting.At the same time,interpersonal communication has been influenced. The impact of the internet on interpersonal communication has advantages and disadvantages.On the one hand,we can communicate with our friends or relatives at any time we want ,and we may make friends with whom have the same intersets to us.The internet shorten the distance between us.On the other hand,the internet replace the common communication,namely communication face by face.In this way,we prefer to building our own visual world on the inteernet,and start to ignore our parents,friends. As far as i am concerned,i feel we should take care of things around us.The internet is just a tool to make our life better.we must pay more attention to our really life.
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