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With the development of technology and science, online shopping are playing an important role in our life. Nowadays, there are many people to shopping on the Internet, but it have some profits and some disadvantages. Firstly, it is convenient for many people to buy all kinds of stuffs. Abviously, you can choose every thing on the internet and compared with the same goods in different stories. Thus,you can buy the better goods. but on the contrary, there are many goods in the internet, so it have some cheat, and you may be unbelievable.what's more, you can spend a lot of money going online shopping. on my point, you can buy something on the internet, but you should look for something carefully. At the better, you can see some others comments. Then you buy it. Importently, you should control your shopping.
