2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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now,many goods had on excessive packaging ,that is very bad for to save our resource . the cause of appearance that is to make money .we think that is aim . but i think that is no must .while is to make money ,on the other hand if did that ,it can waste of resource .