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I have a girl friend,she is very beauty.And better than all, there were young, softly rounded cheeks and bright eyes. She has a kind heart, we are known each other from our child,we go to school togerher go to play,we very closely,as time fast ,we grew audit,we have self family,her husband also my friend,we are very happy each other know,but one day I hate her because she hurt me that she lied me,she company her husband whoe said study and no more time company me, it is pity