拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;熟练使用了一些长难句;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。
My Favorite Sport Play football is a important things in my life ,every weekends I always call some friends to play football ,it is my hobby. When I first time to play football is by chance,in way back to home ,I pick a football,and then I had played it with my friends,I totally love it from then on. I join in a football club,I often take exercise,so my football skills is improved a lot, thus I obtain a position in the team that can compete with other players. My favorite football star is England player David Beckham who has excellent skill and charming looking,I hope I can become a professional football player one day.