2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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On Excessive Packaging Nowadays, with the advanced development of science technology and citizens'needs,lots of production have a phnomonen on excessive packaging.For this phnomonen,we can concluse a number of reasons. Firstly,the major reason that many people tend to have a sense of beauty.It be shown on birthday parties,where everyone have a beautiful gifts be given host. Secondly,producers come up with a good idea that promote the number of sell.the excessive packaging attract many teenagers. Thirdly,in order to meet everyone's needs and advance of living standard,the society has to develop. As far as i am concerned,this phnomonen on excessive packaging is a special pollution and waste.In the long term,our country have a excellent tradition is that we have followed to diligent and thrifty.So,we should reject on excessive packaging.