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I used to live a beautiful small town with green trees all around it. The river, running through the town, have a clear water it which a fish could be see swiming in groups. The house, however, were small and single and the street wasn't wide enough to run cars. People here worked hard all year around yet lived a life of more than poverty. Now great change have take place here. You can see tall building, departments stores and factories everywhere. Cars and buses are running in borad street. But with the development of industry, pollution is becoming more and more serious. To our joy, people have been doing their best to stop pollution and make the town even more beautiful.