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My favorite sport is playing football.It's accidental chance make me fall in love by football.I pick a football on the way to my home,and than,I play it with my friend.From than on,I love play football indeed.I always practice and match with my friends.My favorite football start is David Beckham.My best wish is becomeing a professional football player.