作者能较熟练地使用学术词汇,但词汇积累还有很大进步空间;层次分明,但过渡词欠缺;在平时练习中应增加词汇量的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
As we all known the significance of life is how to spend it with meaningful.We sometimes imagine life to be a sort of process of endeavor.Persistence study or acquire as possible as many knowledge.The other side of life is quite different.They hold the view that we should try our best to enjoy it.There are an element of truth of both of points.To some extend,I inclined to agree the formal view.The reasons are as follows.