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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36949
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
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如果增加些复杂句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用;请注意分段。

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I want to be somebody that I cannot. God!Envious feelings happens again,just because I am not active enough to make good friends with others. What's worse, I have to compete the leader in the students's union.Suddenly I lose my heart just because I don't like to know those who are powerful. Maybe I just think too much,I hope so.An bad idea occurs in my brain,which makes me have nothing to do.I have to recover for my final exams,which is important for my life.If I want to get the schorship I must study harder than others.I miss so many competitions that I don't know.

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