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I want to be somebody that I cannot. God!Envious feelings happens again,just because I am not active enough to make good friends with others. What's worse, I have to compete the leader in the students's union.Suddenly I lose my heart just because I don't like to know those who are powerful. Maybe I just think too much,I hope so.An bad idea occurs in my brain,which makes me have nothing to do.I have to recover for my final exams,which is important for my life. In addition,If I want to get the schorship I must study harder than others.I miss so many competitions that I don't know.