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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36949
要求:
用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
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如果增加些复杂句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。

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I want to be somebody that I cannot. God!Envious feelings happen again,just because I am not active enough to make good friends with others. What's worse, I have to compete the leader in the students's union.Suddenly I lose my heart just because I don't like to know those who are powerful. Maybe I just think too much,I hope so.An bad idea occurs in my brain,which makes me have nothing to do.I have to recover for my final exams,which is important for my life. In addition,If I want to get the schorship I must study harder than others.I miss so many competitions that I don't know.

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