单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;文章层次较为清晰;部分句子偏简单,注意有错误的句子;请注意分段。
I remembered my hometown was beautiful when I was a children. You could see the small town in clouded the trees.In the river,you could see the fishes playing in the water.Athought people live wasn't rich,but they are very happy.They always visited somebody home after dinner. But, the hometown is change, I don't like