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since last summer, i have written to my pen pal, seda, who lives in turkey. i became acquainted with her when i went to england for a study tour. we stayed with the same family, and she was my roommate and classmate as well. sometimes we went to the movies together after dinner. seda is very easy to get along with. i will always remember the two weeks i spent with her. we didn't forget each other and kept writing to each other after we returned home. although i haven't seen her again since i left england, i still know how she is through letters, cards and photographs. seda tells me her secrets and also shares her happiness and sadness with me . both of us hope that we will meet each other somewhere one day. maybe i'll go to turkey to visit her, or she'll come to taiwan to visit me.