作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;文中有几处错误的句子,部分句子偏简单;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
Nowadays the Internet has become part of people's life, and millions of young people have made friends online. in my opinion , i believe making friends online is to wise . First of all .it can accumulate many of social relations to future . it can help us to explore our unknown to world
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