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My hometown is very beautiful.A quiet and beauty place in which my live.I love my hometown,because it my heart place and it makes me happy and relaxed. In my hometown ,the air is very fresh than other places. It is close to the city centre, 15 minutes drive to the city centre.There is a park in the town, people like the morning exercise in the park.The place I love the most is the Youth Activity Center, where there are a lot of things to do. I love my hometown。