中考考前作文集中训练附范文20:网上交友

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i think that it is very bad for people to make friend online.because there are all kinds of people online . you can not recognzed that what is the man like. maybe he is a criminal. i hear from my sister said that the girl made a friend from online, in that time, she was chatting long time with the boy by QQ, and then, she gradully familiar with the boy. one day, the boy asked the girl to meet each other. in fact ,it is a big fraud. the boy stole her all money in that date. she just lost her money, maybe she lost her life if the boy was a killer. so we have to make friend carefully in the socity.