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One of my good friend is Miao. Miao is a ten-month old white cat. I adopted him when he was only one-month old. Miao likes to stay with me. When I read a book or use computer, he is always by my side silently. But sometimes he likes to step on my keyboard. Everytime I wake up, he is sleeping beside me. I like his company.