3.参考词汇:牛津--Oxford费用--fee
作者学术词汇方面要多累积,词汇表达不够丰富;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用,注意文中的几处句子错误;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
As a Buddhist, not only do I devote myself to study, but also take part in many activities. to help the poor and the animals. In morden society, people start to know what we call ''human care'', from my point of view, ''human care is we. human beings care about all the things we approach.