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huoguo is very popular in china,which orgin in chongqing ,mang of chinese like it.recently,but more and more people think it is very harmful to body life ,we should stop eating huo guo any more. it is a cultural that gaining popularity in china market ,Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should