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Hi, Mary Chen: I am LiMing. Because I have to go to Bei Jing tomorrow for working and need stay there in a week, so I can't talking about the New Year party with you. Please send me the time and place of the company's New Year party. so I can prepare for it. Thanks LiMing Dec 23th,2008